This week in Literacy we have been
writing and editing our own Extreme Environment shape poems. Our class have
written a range of shape poems about icebergs, snowflakes, polar bears and
penguins. Here is an example we came up with. What features can you spot?
A
giant
icy iceberg is
as delicate as icicles.
Slippery pieces sliding
down
the iceberg and cracking
open under the grey,
dirty
water.
Dear Miss Jollife,
ReplyDeleteHere are the features that I spotted.
This shape poem is in the shape of the subject (iceberg) and describes it as well.
It is very descriptive and uses many good adjectives.
It uses a simile (as delicate as an icicle).
It uses alliteration (icy iceberg).
It uses a powerful verb (sliding).
It uses onomatopoeia (cracking).
Dear Miss Jolliffe
ReplyDeleteHere are the features I found,
The first feature is that the poem is in the shape of what it is about, that is the first one I spotted.
It contains alliteration such as slippery and sliding / icy iceberg.
It uses onomatopoeia, cracking. It also had a powerful verb which is sliding.
It has adjectives like giant, dirty etc., and I think the reader will really like this wonderful poem. Finally it includes a simile which is as delicate as icicles.
I can also really imagine that this poem was written in the cold frosty days of winter or originating from a extreme environment like the poles
This poem also has an adjective. The adjective is giant.
ReplyDeleteMiss Joliffe,
ReplyDeleteYou have used these features,
Alliteration: icy iceberg icicles, slippery sliding
Adjectives: icy, giant, grey, dirty, delicate
Similes: as delicate as icicles
Shape: I think you could make the iceberg bigger.
This poem has a simile - that's "delicate as icicles".
ReplyDeleteIt also uses adjectives.
It is descriptive, not factual.
This shape poem is in the shape of the subject it is describing.
It uses alliteration - icy iceberg / slippery and sliding.
It contains onomatopoeia such as cracking.
Finally, it uses a powerful verb which is sliding.
I can see these features :
ReplyDeletealliteration - icy iceberg
simile - as delicate as icicles
adjectives - slippery, dirty, giant, sliding, icy, cracking and delicate
and the shape - it looks like an iceberg.
Miss Jolliffe,I found some adjectives they are:icy,dirty,giant and slippery.
ReplyDeleteI found alliteration (icy iceberg)
ReplyDeleteThere is 1 simile (as delicate as icicles)
It uses a powerful verb (sliding)
You have used alliteration (icy iceberg), a simile (as delicate as icicles), and an adjective (giant).
ReplyDeleteYou have use very descriptive and many good adjectives.
ReplyDeleteYou have use a simile (as delicate as an icicle).
You have use alliteration (icy iceberg).
You have use a powerful verb (sliding).
Miss Jolliffe in your poem you have used great ajectives such as giant,youve also used alliteration like icy iceberg.In the peom you have used a simile (as delicate as icicles.
ReplyDeleteThe adjectives I can see are Slippery,Sliding,Cracking
ReplyDelete