Wednesday, 16 October 2013

The Werepuppy- writing a letter


In class we have just finished reading the ‘Werepuppy’ by Jaqueline Wilson. We are also learning how to write letters. Imagine you are Micky; write a letter to the lady who sold Wolfie to him. Make sure you thank her and explain how owning Wolfie has changed things for you. Post your letter on the blog.

Can you also leave 2 stars and a wish for someone else’s letter?
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28 comments:

  1. Saleha17 October 2013 at 11:12

    Dear lady,
    I am writing to say how Wolfy is getting on .
    He has been good and bad .The bad thing he has done is wet the floor so mum did`t let him sleep with me,I wished he did.
    By:Micky

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    1. Siddharth17 October 2013 at 19:12

      Saleha, I like your post and here is my opinion.
      Star- That you used first person very well and expanded the letter a bit by saying I wished he did.
      Star- You said why he was good and bad
      Wish- I wish you could write a bit more in your letter

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    2. Unknown18 October 2013 at 08:02

      * I like that you have started to think about the layout of a letter, don't forget the address though.
      * I am please that you have started to explain the point that you have made in your second sentence.

      My wish- remember to make a point, explain and then expand in every paragraph.

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    3. Saleha21 October 2013 at 17:29

      Well Miss Jolliffe
      I was in a rush so I forgot
      and next time I will.

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    4. hello22 October 2013 at 20:12

      Star- I liked that you have why he was good and bad. Star- I liked that you have written why you are writing to her. Wish-I wish you could have written three paragraphs. Prisha

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  2. Siddarth17 October 2013 at 13:41

    12 Church Road
    United Kingdom
    TW3 1GR
    17th October 2013


    Dear Mrs Webb,
    I am writing to thank you for giving Wolfie to me.
    It really made a big difference to my life by coming to me when I need help and helping me so much all along to make my life as bright as the sun.

    If you hadn’t given him to me, I would have been bullied by Darren and his gang. It also made a difference because after he bit my wicked, greedy sister Marigold, she did not tease me any more and at the end, instead of teasing me, she suddenly became friends with me. Life was troublesome before and has sorted out a lot after he came. It strongly made me forget that I was scared of dogs.

    It helped me prove that I am not a sad old baby anymore and would be like a normal boy not afraid of anything. It has also helped me gain lots of courage and confidence.

    That’s why I owe to say thanks to you for making a great big difference in my life.

    See you soon!

    Mickey

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    1. Anonymous17 October 2013 at 22:02

      Star - You have described well how Wolfie changed your life.
      Star - You have used paragraphs well.
      Wish - You could have used more adjectives.
      ISHAAN

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    2. Unknown18 October 2013 at 07:56

      * I like that you have used an embedded clause.
      * You have clearly organised your letter into paragraphs.

      My wish- check your third paragraph makes sense. Remember to always re-read your work.

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    3. Siddharth18 October 2013 at 16:33

      Thank you for your words Ishaan.


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    4. Siddharth18 October 2013 at 16:38

      Thanks for your words Miss Jolliffe. I will remember to check my work once I am done.

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    5. Annabella18 October 2013 at 16:47

      Hello Siddarth I'm Annabella I'm from waterloo class.

      STAR:Good vocabulary
      STAR:You've explained if Mrs Webb hadn't given Wolfie to mickey
      WISH:More adjectives

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    6. Siddharth18 October 2013 at 21:51

      Thanks for your comment Annabella. Thanks for visiting the Downing Street class blog and kindly commenting on my work.

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  3. Anonymous17 October 2013 at 21:50

    Webb’s Dog Shelter
    23 Picasso Lane
    London
    W12 7TA
    17th October, 2013


    Dear Miss Webb,

    I am writing to thank you for giving me the dog the other day. I have decided to call him Wolfie because he reminds me of a baby werewolf. I am getting on very well with him. Although he was getting into quite a lot of mischief at the beginning, at the moment he has adapted himself nicely to our household. He has changed from an indignant, naughty stray dog to a likeable friendly puppy.

    He has made a lot of difference to my life, which was miserable and nightmarish with all the teasing from my annoying, selfish little sister and the bullying from the mean, nasty gang of troublemakers in school. He has also helped me overcome the overwhelming fear of werewolves and dogs.

    After the biting incident in the shop, my sister Marigold has made an effort to change. She even stood up for me to the school bullies, Darren and his gang, before Wolfie came to our rescue leaping savagely at them like a great grey dart.

    So thank you again for giving me Wolfie who has brought such great joy and happiness into my life, and has helped me grow up into a courageous and confident boy.

    In a few weeks time I am going on holiday with my family and Wolfie is coming with us as well.

    I look forward to visiting you in the future.

    Yours sincerely,

    Micky.

    ISHAAN

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  4. Unknown18 October 2013 at 07:59

    * You have used complex sentences effectively, for example, when you begin the sentence with a connective (after, although)
    * This letter is effectively organised.

    My wish- In the 5th paragraph you have stated a point but remember to explain and expand.

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  5. Anonymous18 October 2013 at 16:42

    Thank you Miss Jolliffe...ISHAAN

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  6. Annabella18 October 2013 at 16:50

    Hello Miss Jolliffe I'm Annabella from waterloo class and I think the children in your class have done really good work.

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  7. Sahnavi21 October 2013 at 17:06

    Hello Miss Jollifffe I'm Sahnavi from Olympic Park class and I 'm sorry for seeing downing street's blog but I was so delighted to see your class' blog and say that these are the best children you have.

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  8. hello24 October 2013 at 20:00

    Webb's Dog Shelter
    10 Florence Road
    Hounslow
    TW3 7AC

    24th October 2013

    Dear Miss Webb,

    I am writing to thank you for giving me the grey, frightening dog yesterday. I have named him Wolfie because he looks like a werewolf. He gets into mischief at certain times but I'm sure he will settle in soon.

    After he bit my annoying sister Marigold, she has started to make peace with me. Wolfie also protects me by leaping at Darren and his rude gang.I don't know why Dad doesn't like him.Its probably because he doesn't like me.Wolfie has made a great difference to my life and has helped me prove that I am not a sad,weak boy but a strong,courageous boy.

    Thank you again for giving him to me,and,as I said,he has made a big difference to my life.I will keep him forever,no matter what.

    Yours Sincerely,
    Micky

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    1. hello5 November 2013 at 17:17

      Sorry, I forgot to put my name! By Prisha

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  9. ayomide yr 61 November 2013 at 12:39

    Dear Miss Jolliffe,
    I am Ayomide, the girl thst left your class on 28th June 2013. I am surprised that you are not in Yr 5 anymore, but in Downing Street Class. I am missing Chatsworth, but I'm also enjoying my new school(It's not that new anymore!).Please can you tell my old class mates that I am missing them,THANK YOU!

    Yours Sincerely, Ayomide Dairo P.S. I MISS U!

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    1. Tyler5 November 2013 at 16:15

      Hi Ayomide, It's been a long time since you have left.We all miss you as well. Year 6 is different this year, we have been split into 3 classes mixing with the other class. Isaac has left and we are all doing fine. MISS U call u later.

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    2. Grace5 November 2013 at 16:26

      Nice to hear from you Ayomide. How is your school? I am missing you to!

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    3. Unknown7 November 2013 at 12:09

      Dear Ayomide,

      It is very nice to hear from you.

      I am really enjoying teaching my Year 3 class and I am pleased that you like your new school.

      I have told a few of your old classmates that you have posted so hopefully they will be in touch.

      Thank you for writing.

      Miss Jolliffe

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    4. Ayomide Yr 614 December 2013 at 13:54

      Thank you so much, Miss Jolliffe !

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  10. Zayn5 December 2013 at 19:36

    Dear lady who gave me wolfy,
    He has been good but done some mischief he couldnt sleep with me tonight wolfy has basicly change my life the other day I was being piked on wolfy new for some weird reason also my sister sais DON'T YOU TALK TO MY BROTHER LIKE THAT! I couldnd belive it because it was the first time she stood up for me shes still moaning and wining an complaining about when she got bitten by him when I had tamed him I felt a TING sound in my heart Im not shure what it ment mabye a freindship that we would always be by eachothers side if we need backup in a bad sitoation That is how Wolfy changed my life. Oh and BLOGGING IS AWSOME!!

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  11. Zayn6 December 2013 at 18:21

    Mrs Webb's dog shelter
    13 Stanwell road
    Bedfont
    Tw148na

    Dear Mrs Webb

    I am writing to thank you for the terrifying werwolf looking puppy you gave me yesterday he has proved Im not a little silly winey baby but a big strong boy who is full of never ending careering courage I have named him wolfy because it of the silly werwolf's I used to be frightened of.

    My mean sister marigold stopped teasing me when Wolfy came home maybe it was the bite it could be she dosnt want to get bitten by him anymore wolfy has made loads of things easier for me I was going to be clobbered by the EVIL the DREADED Darren and his rude gang wolfy knew and leapt like an athlete out of the car and snarled and growled scarcely in Darren's BIG MEAN FACE! Darren never threatens me anymore bit Im worried he will strike back some day.

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  12. Tabby12 December 2013 at 19:05

    Mrs E.Webb
    Mrs Webb's Dog Shelter
    TW3 4ZZ
    Hounslow
    Middlesex

    Dear Mrs Webb,
    I LOVE Wolfie BUT dad is sometimes quite angry with him and a mean boy at my school called Darren got chewed to pieces because he was VERY rude to me so Wolfie came to the rescue! Mum regrets having Wolfie and I don't, Marigold has finally stoped teasing me now because Wolfie bit her.
    You Sincerly
    Micky.

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  13. hello14 December 2013 at 15:38

    Stars:
    You have started to think about the layouts of a letter.
    I like that you have used connectives.

    Wish:
    Next time, try to write in paragraphs and remember a letter isn't two sentences!
    Prisha

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